Using Specific, Descriptive Language
Either tell a story that shows how you were transformed by specific experiences – or use a variety of specific examples that demonstrate the person you are. Focus on what they don’t already know – especially the stories and images which best demonstrate your character.
Revision Is Everything
As you reread your work, make sure to:
- omit all vague words
- read your work aloud, adding in punctuation and transitions when needed, and combining or dividing sentences when they sound awkward
- ask other adults to read your draft and make suggestions
- ask a teacher to read your final draft
- avoid saying anything obvious (e.g. “My name is John Doe and I’m writing this letter with hopes of being accepted at The University of Arizona”).
Go to the following Websites
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collegebound.net/article/v/18907/admissions-office-q-awriting-the-personal-statement
Here’s a link with more ideas about how and what to write. -
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/owlprint/642
Here’s another link with detailed instructions, including examples of personal statements and what admissions committee members are looking for.
Upload your draft to your portfolio.
- Draft a personal statement. Don’t worry about the length for your first draft.
- After getting feedback from other readers, revise your statement.
- When revising, follow the length limit set by the UA: No more than 500 words.
Congratulations on completing Module 9!
Now let's go on to Module 10